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I would almost take this out: (this slum is rather fitting)unless it is important to the meaning, because I think the wording of every other line is far superior. LOVE this: "it tastes of vinegar/and nothing more"
yeah, i actually agree. i didn't really like that line but i thought it needed something else. i'll try to think of something.
No, I think it really doesn't need anything between the two stanzas! :D
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I would almost take this out:
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unless it is important to the meaning, because I think the wording of every other line is far superior. LOVE this: "it tastes of vinegar/and nothing more"
yeah, i actually agree. i didn't really like that line but i thought it needed something else. i'll try to think of something.
ReplyDeleteNo, I think it really doesn't need anything between the two stanzas! :D
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